https://youtu.be/kzDn_uNNGyM
I got feedback saying that I improve on the speed, body language and details of my pitch. I did not receive any criticism, thus I kept everything the same in this pitch as the second one. Being the third time, I nearly have this pitch memorized and because I do not have to focus so much on the words, I was able to turn more of my intention to my vocal inflection and body language to improve the pitch.
Hello Juliana,
ReplyDeleteGreat job on improving your elevator pitch. Focusing on your vocal inflection and body language truly helped your pitch become more effective and made your product sound more intriguing for customers. Your video flowed very well as you went from your hook and then started explaining your product. I can tell that you rehearsed your pitch multiple times because you sounded very confidant.
Hey Julianna,
ReplyDeleteI think you have improved significantly on the third elevator pitch. Your body language and voice was very welcoming and allowed the audience to see how invested you are in your business idea. I think it is a great sign that at this point you found yourself memorizing your pitch. As a result of this, your other qualities of the pitch were very professional. Great job with this elevator pitch!
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ReplyDeleteJulianna,
ReplyDeleteGreat job on your pitch. As you mentioned, I noticed how much your body language has changed from your first pitch to this one. With constantly practicing and performing the speech, it becomes second nature and easier to do. I also believe that you put more emphasis on your vocal and made me feel like I was listening to an actual business person speaking about their business. You sounded extremely passionate and like you understood your business very well. Great job!
Julianna,
ReplyDeleteCompared to how your very first pitch was, you have improved greatly! You seem comfortable, knowledgeable, and like a trustworthy source of information for this app. Im glad to see you've taken the time to work on improving your body language with the pitch, and I think you have really done a great job overall! My only advice would just be to keep working on your memorization, and maybe be dynamic with your movement instead of just standing in one place!
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ReplyDeleteJulianna,
ReplyDeleteThis is so much better than your first pitch! You said you would improve speed, body language, and details and you definitely did. It shows that you truly took the time to focus on those aspects of the pitch. You definitely have a great idea and know the business. Your pitch had a great flow and did a good job of transitioning into your description of the product. As a result of all of this, you had a great third pitch! Keep up the fantastic work.